Wow! This is very different - Who says an ol’ dog can’t try some new tricks?..
I’m really diggin’ the layered vocals! Suitably menacing. Not listening on decent speakers, so I haven’t got much for the bash - it came across well on these speakers, although the drums were a little on the “ticky” side.
…but to answer your query: “…wondering if this comes off as a bit creepy”
I would say "Yes, but not quite as creepy as “I like her skin” from the Vocal production video thread.