So I've increased the vocal volume a couple more Db, and it seems to be clearer. There's a couple lines that are not easy to understand for me played loud, but fine at a low volume.
This is about as far as I can go, I feel, even with all the good advice, and I think it is an improvement. In fact, I applied Bark of the Dog to the master mix as per a Brandon video, and it did seem to help in some subtle way.
I'm not a good singer technically, and a worse vocal mixer. I usually work with best takes and leave a lot of errors. Unfortunately, bringing the vocals up also reveals even more errors, but this may be a happy medium. I don't intend to take singing lessons but will look at the video. Who knows?
More parts- bass, bg vox- won't transform the song into a masterpiece but may sound like they belong rather than got squeezed in.
I am keeping the basic drums but variating them throughout the song. It is lively but not so repetitious under the hood.
Oh, I repeat POBP 20 times!
Many thanks, everyone. I liked the song's strangeness, and you've helped me make it significantly stronger and like it even more. All I had was that title and maybe the basic arpeggio since 2013, and I do find it amusing I actually incorporated it as the central vehicle in the song.
And I can assure you the next song you will bash will be entirely different!