Hi Eric Yeah the song is just things I think about as of late. I sit back and watch family/kids in this endless furry of activities and think maybe they all should slow down. I love your always short accurate takes on posts…thanks for taking the time
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Love it! The harmonies are really cool! I def see the Beatles comparison! Message is great too, personally I’m in the middle of a university degree, 3 young kids and my wife has been recovering from cancer - things have been crazy, would love to slow down and take it all in for a bit. Easier said than done though I’m afraid. Plus, it would be nice if I could squeeze in a little more music time 
Nice work on this one!
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Hi Pirrie Yes, I remember those hectic days of long ago. 20 years old, wife pregnant, in college etc. Sorry to hear about your wife. My wife is a 20 year survivor and doing very well.
I will always have a part of my brain that pulls me toward Beatle song. I do love harmonies.
Thank you for giving me some of your precious slow down time
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Very nice work Paul! Couldn’t agree more with the message as well. The older I get the more my priorities change and the more I try to pay attention to what’s really important. Easier said than done sometimes… and I’m about to enter into several months of insane busy-ness, so this is a good reminder to take a deep breath.
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I was just thinking of you this morning about your finances etc. Good to hear from you.
Yay I caught this one!! 
A fresh sounding sweetie… lovely sentiment and the chorus has some really cool chord twists and turns and now I’m reading the other comments I can’t help but agree with that Beatles suggestion. I’d like more backing vox, but you know me on that haha… I kept imagining yet more oohs and ahhs and just a little more volume to them.
I would like some reverb on your vocal, just to give a sense of place/space and some eq adjustments if you were in a technical mode… grin…
But as a song, yep, tis a sweetie and with a worldwide message.
[o, as an aside… I just noticed that the format has changed for ‘replying’ and I can’t see my message in a separate window… I wonder why that is… ponder ponder]
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Hi Emma from NZ Yes the Beatles. Nobody caught it yet but the entire prechorus is from the Beatles song “If I fell” ha ha Love those chords that go in some crazy places and then back to the root. Ebm D Db Bbm Ebm D Em D I play that song a lot because of that fact. I thought my bgv were louder. I just listened and they are almost non existent? Lots of places to add stuff like the oo’s etc I know.
I usually record without anything on the vox and if anything put on a little delay. I wish I knew what I was doing. As long as I can still bumble along and finish stuff, I well keep a goin.
Stay out of that creek…things can bite you there thanks once again
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Have you ever posted any of your songs on reddit/songwriters? It’s a good place to get objective feedback from other songwriters. I find it inspires me when I post songs on there and listen to others as well.
Hey James No, I do not know of that site. I will check it out. I have plenty of time on my hands being retired to listen to songs and comment. Not that many bashes here per week:) thanks for the link
I get on there too. I actually message some of those guys to come join us! Feel free to do the same!
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Nice work, Paul your music just gets better and better every time I hear it. You are really putting it out there!
Thanks Glen
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Ah! Feaker is back! I knew we’d be hearing more from you!
This is really nice, Paul. I love that “many-things-to-do-chorus.” Very different musical direction than the rest of the song, which emphasizes your message beautifully. Nice 70’s British touch.
Your recording is SO clean. I love that I can hear the breaths in your vocals (I always edit that out! I’m gonna start leaving it in now!), but cannot hear other distracting noises. I like the vocals up front the way you have them. So crisp and intimate. Sounds like you’re right here.
The guitars sound a little tentative in the beginning. Very fragile, sort of. However, I don’t know that I’d change them. I think that adds to the intimacy I’m talking about. However, when you shift into that cool British piece, I’m hearing maybe a departure from that, with a little tighter sound, a little more build (not much though!).
Definitely use the bass more. Just inch up the volume a tad. I think it adds a lot to the song! But I can’t hear it enough, especially on the verses! But the chorus too: they’re “there” but I think bringing them up would add the the energy of the chorus, and add fullness as well.
I might bring the vocals down a touch though, but I don’t know that I’d touch anything with fx on the vocals.
Last, Paul, in the short time I’ve been on this forum (just a few months), I’ve learned to appreciate you as a tender heart with a something to say. There’s a cool verse in Proverbs 15:1 that says, “A gentle answer turns away wrath, but a harsh word stirs up anger.” I love that, and that’s you, man! Your music has a wonderful lyrical depth and richness to it, that is enhanced by your gentle, simple, delicate way of delivering it musically. You have a lot to say, a lot to offer, and your music makes a difference, buddy. Thank you! Keep doin’ what yer doin’
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“And another thing…”
Thanks for re-posting your “I’m Very Sad” song. I just noticed you put it back up. Will listen to it and make some comments there later. Again, glad you’re “back”!!
Tesgin
Keep it up my friend if you are having fun doing that’s all that really matters. Stay tuned I’m going to send something in soon. Got to do it and put something out there! Glen
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I couldn’t help but start singing harmony on the second listen. It was so natural I will probably try to create a mix just for fun, @feaker. I like the song a lot, lyrics are wise and well expressed and need saying nowadays.
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Well, that’s exactly what I did! I hope you don’t mind my mix, Paul, it just happened. I was going for that slowing down easy going vibe that you already had going so well. It was educational for me to do this, it made me pay close attention to its musical structure, of a good song. I added this simple piano line and panned my vocal a little left and lower volume. No reverb/delay effects. Just some thickener and compression.
feaker,
Thank you for your review! Now your song from your original post: it starts out nicely on guitar. The first verse has a good melody. After that (the chorus?) it very much has a Beatles vibe for me (not a bad thing). Vocals are pretty good. Part of me wants to say, “belt it out more”, but the song is rather mellow. Audio quality is good. On second listen, the song worked better for me. On first listen the chorus kind of threw me for a loop. Nice melodies.
Good one Paul. A nice reminder for all of us. Peaceout. 
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