I just listened to your first version and am commenting on that. Interesting approach to this song. I am enjoying the difference approaches people are taking. To me, I think someone said it above, the vocal lacked “sparkle” and it felt a little flat as a result. Actually, now that I’ve written it, that could really work for this song. The kick was overpowering with the result being that it distracted from the vocal, which should be THE star of this track. Other than that, I think your balances were pretty good and it was a nice solid mix.