I think this is a very good mix! While I can see you could have done something else with the snare sound, I think it works alright. What I really like is that you have a well balanced and clear mix, and I can tell a lot of attention was paid to automation in order to keep things under control and interesting throughout the song. The drum cymbal ‘clicking’ seems to be addressed well enough in places, though it’s still a bit noticeable in others. That was one of the biggest challenges of this mix IMO.
I think you managed to come through with a very tasteful yet interesting version of the song!