I irregularly do spoken word, and I often am criticized for not sounding comfortable with what I’m saying, sounding like I’m reading lines off a page. It is a fair point as it is more akin to acting than singing, as a good actor gets so into the role you believe he/she is actually saying this to you.
In this case, Stan, the production is near perfection. The background music is pleasantly nondescript as I retain none of the tune, just the ambience. The vocal delivery is also very smooth, and first listen I discerned no fault. The second time I succumbed to a little hypercriticism and felt it was a little bit emotionally flat overall.
And even if the purpose is to meditate by, I wished for a tad more melodrama, the nervous anticipation and barely controlled joy of discovery. Too much and it again sounds contrived, ‘acted’ out, or just plain weird, hehe, so it is harder to win than it may seem.
All vocals are subject to this same issue, and achieving a compelling ‘authentic’ delivery is almost the art of introducing strategic errors in the performance that strengthen the illusion.
That said, I’d give this delivery a B+, maybe an A-, but just shy of Oscar winning. You are in the ballpark, and it is so easy to not line up the emotions with the message and just justify it for artistic license.