Very creative arrangement and use of effects! I like some of the things you did differently to distinguish your mix from others, but the one of stopping all instruments and leaving silence before one of the vocals in the chorus was a bit jarring to me. Cool effect, but the silence seemed too long after that first one. The breath in the beginning was interesting too, but it doesn’t seem to fit the context. I can understand that ‘breath’ thing on the vocals though, I had to work on that for sure.
Something I had to work on was that ‘stick’ sound from the drum overheads. I’m hearing quite a bit in your mix and I think the song benefits from having that addressed more (reduced in prominence). I just find it distracting.
The lead vocal does seem to be quite prominent. I went strong on that too, but I think yours dominates the mix. The vocal reverb seems to add to that too; there’s a lot of reverb, and while I like the sound of the space you achieved, the reverb level is quite strong.
Definitely the most creative contest mix I have heard so far though!