I wonder if the lyrics/ vocals were given a bit more space between phrases, to give the voice a bit of time to breathe , maybe it would benefit the listener. The singing is quite constant and unrelenting. The music has a nice feel, so I’d like to see that shine through between some of your vocal phrasing. I think the song could really shine if you added a chorus, especially if that chorus was really big and different from the verse.
Thank you for your insightful suggestions, Wicked! I think I was trying to sound a little relentless, to reflect the way we get worked up by the media and news as entertainment stirs the pots. It does have a long chord progression, no chorus, aside from the lullaby refrain. I often do not have a chorus in mind with a song, and often that’s what a collaborator will provide that I cannot, and after it seems so natural I almost forget I had nothing to do with it!
I’m with wicked on this @steban , it’s all pretty well done and as usual the lyrics are great but it all runs together musically without some variation. The standard chorus/bridge structure would work but some different instruments here and there would help or maybe just a quiet interlude or two?
Thank you for the reviews! Now your song: Vocals sound similar to Pink Floyd and a bit like Ray Davies; fine by me! Nice old piano! Reminds me somewhat of a honky-tonk piano vinyl album that my grandparents gave me about 50 years ago, and the record was probably a lot older than me. Instrumentally, it reminds me of The Kinks somewhat, as far as rock bands go. Cool song, I like it!