Ooh yes!!! This is a beauty Paul…
Love the gnarl of the guitars and the drive-vibe. Great beginning, too, nice mood-setting. Your songwriting is going from strength to strength!
My improvement thoughts… hmm, cool song… overall I’d just like a bit MORE, more volume more angry more grrrunt…there is a cool fierceness to the song… I like that. I’d like the vocal even a bit more gritty angry… and to hear those gnarly guitars even more, they are very cool.
Sorry I’m late to the party, been away at my son’s wedding… phew, back to unreal world now