I've listened to both mixes that you've given to us for a listen... mix 3 is a massive improvement and I echo quite a few of the sentiments expressed by our fellow musicians.
As there is not too much to add I'll have a good read of the lyrics and give some thoughts on them...
For me this gives the song an Arthurian theme. I could picture dragons flying around the sky breathing fire only to be unseen by some fair maiden, followed by two good clichés about a broom, maybe a witch's?
No there's a word I've never heard of! Not that it matters... it fits in nicely!
Did you sing "biting" second time round? Could be my ageing ears playing tricks on me?
Quite a haunting verse that in many ways I can relate to! A day drowned at dawning. Many a time I have felt like this, dreading the day ahead and risks simply not paying off, just like this young lady is!
Quite apt for a few hours spent in the recording studio! My view is that if a musician is not prepared to take risks, then there's no point being in there!
It's a great ending to the song too, kinda summing up the rest of the lyrics!
A lovely piece of work. You are very talented and dare to do things differently